I'm pleased to note that this morning, with the exception of the movie titles, I managed to finish the first draft of TelePresence.
Unfortunately, I have to mail it to Analog tomorrow, as I'm working on deadline. I've managed to send copies to a few first readers whose opinions I trust very highly. Also, gnomi is going over it as well, and I've done one pass through a hard copy and already found a lot of stuff to change.
If anyone else has the time to go over it tonight, and would like me to send them a copy of the first draft, let me know. However, if you decide you won't be able to give me comments until after, say, 8 AM EDT on 29 September 2004, then please refrain from doing so. I don't want to read all about the story's problems after it's already in the mail. :-)