mabfan (Michael A. Burstein) (mabfan) wrote,
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No Winner Yet, But the Top Five and an Extra

Folks:

Since it would be unfair to leave everyone hanging, I'll tell you now that it will take me some time to determine a winning entry. I want to try to come up with a plot first before I name a winner. However, I have managed to whittle the list down to the five that I find most adaptable for me.

You see, all of the entries were great opening lines; I'm delighted to see how many creative people I have reading here. The problem, of course, is that not every opening line is one I can do something with; I know my weaknesses. So if your entry isn't a finalist, it's not because I didn't like it or that it wasn't a good opening; it's simply because I couldn't think of what I could personally do with it.

And now, at the risk of losing most of my readers, here are the ones I'm contemplating, along with my thoughts:



1. pocketnaomi:
It wasn't so very long ago. But it's been forgotten anyway.

If you re-read the page with all the entries on it, you know that I already commented favorably on this one. I like the idea behind it; but to make it work, I'd have to figure out just what this event was that was forgotten.

2. zmook:
It was the frog that first caught my attention.

What can I say? I like frogs. :-) Actually, I once tried writing a story with odd frogs in it a while ago; maybe this is a hint to tell me to try again.

3. scarlettina:
One shot to the head was all it took, all that was usually required.

And again, I commented before that this might make a good opening to the novel I'm contemplating. But perhaps I could find a use for it elsewhere.

4. agracru:
"Delay your death," he said, "I want to tell you a story."

What fascinated me about this one was the idea of delaying one's death. Do these people die on a schedule? What's the story that he needs to tell? I want to know.

5. cellio:
A hand-written journal was the thing I least expected to find in my father's personal effects.

Given my own personal history, I'd find this one interesting to work with.

6. hakamadare:
"Your lucky number is 37185937629586738," declared the fat little man. "Look for it everywhere."

This is the extra one. I think this would make an excellent opening to a Frederic Brown or William Tenn story. But I'm not sure if I'm up to the task. (And, hakamadare, this isn't the number you showed me on Monday night...)



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